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Old 07-27-04, 03:55 PM   #5
D.A.
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Very simple verse no hate juss opinion/
It was nicely structured and ok wordplay/
Good flow could have been better/
But I feel you cause its juss a freestyle/
But you need to use more coplex wordplay to elevate the rhyme/
Also you gotta get them multis down, they will make the flow tight man/
Good piece I give it a 7.5/10, keep elevatin/
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