WillNova
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines...its newbish...structure is ok...flow fell off a little bit...u had a few multis...wordplay wasnt good...none of ur punches connected...no good personals..

String9487
structure is alright...flow fell off a lil...u had a few multis...wordplay was wack...a few of ur punches connected....no good personals...

Overall
both had an ok structure...both had a decent flow...both had a few multis...neither had good wordplay...neither had good personals...string had more connecting punches...so basing off of that...string gets my vote...

VOTE - STRING9487