Thread: Give Feed Back On This Im Trying To Write A Book And I Want Critisizm
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Old 08-02-04, 02:51 AM   #5
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nice story line, good use of repetition also increase vocab and structure not bad, and u stick to the point pretty much.. so fix minor errors and u str8, "ghetto shakespeare"...
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