Voted For: caliph

this was better than ya last battle I voted on... ya opener was pretty good but it started to dwindle after that... ya structure was a lot better this time around but it still needs work... try to use more lines like ya first one. not a great verse by any means but more than enough to win.

brotherpara:

you must've just started rhyming... it shows in ya text... that shyt stood out like you wrote in bold letters, itallics, and changed te font color to lime green or some shyt. you really should practice more in open mic before you start battling people. get some ideas on structure from the peops in there so you can see how it's actually done. work on ya punches and vocab also. this shyt ain't as hard as it seems. keep working at it and you'll be ok... one