Not bad. Dont worry bout lengthening or shortening your poems. poems are whatever you make them to be. That being said - I (personally, not subjectively) wasnt feel the syllable count, as of course, I am an audio head and am used to making lines equal in lenght so they flow smooth. So for me, the rhymes were hard to read fluently. I dont know if that was intentional, but i assume not, so I'd say work on that. Other than that though - multis were good, and poem was aight. 1

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