Voted For: Lekchur

Lekchur

BRUISIN THIS MAN, Like 'Throwin In Poker Cards' I'm 'REMOVIN YA HANDS'
Yea I'm All About My Money, But Still I'll 'Drop G' Like 'LOSIN A GRAND'!!
->>first line was weak but i liked the meta in the second one

Shit DUDE CAN YOU STAND? I Guess Not When I'm SNATCHIN YA LEGS
It's Like I 'Flipped And Broke Ya Name' Bitch Cuz Im 'CRACKIN A EGG'!!
->>forced multi in first line led to weak punch...punch in second line was pretty tight

Arms SNAPPIN LIKE PEGS, Look At My Wins Your The NEXT TO GET KILLED
YES THIS IS REAL, Cuz You Know Lek Gon 'Move E' Like 'EXTACY PILLS'!!
->>a stretch to make this work because his name ends with e so it doesnt really make sense to call him e but it was cool so this bar came out pretty nice

Slice Ya NECK AND YA GRILL! You Beat Me? Now That's SILLY I SAY
'Fucka GEE' Man!! This Niggas 'Name' Should 'REALLY BE GAY(GEe)'!!
->>hah dr. suess rhyme in the first line...kinda fillerish

The MILLY WILL SPRAY, Injectin Holes In Ya To SMACK YOU INTO PLACE
I Know Your A Ho! So I'll Have 'G In Tears' Like The TATTOO ON THEY FACE!!
->>this was your nicest meta and im glad you saved it for the end nice closer even with the weak setup

Gee

Look at his sig, he sounds "cocky" like hes the best guy in sports,
but he spits "nervously" against me like wen criminals testify in courts.
->>with the new battle system you cant see siggy's...second line was weak

I'm the sheriff of "Pensylvania", your rhymes are crimes, and I'm labelin capers*,
so with mah "pistol" I cause "mania", and put more holes in you, than when I'm staplin papers.
->>ehh it was alright...forced multi but decent

I never "waste rhymes", like construction workers, I never "save-a-bar",
after I "knock him out", I'll leave this bitch confused, like his "av-a-tar".
->>i didnt get the first line and i cant see the avatar

Nobody understands your lines, you need more "substance", originality, you lack the lyrical "fat",
cuz your rhymes "go over people's heads" like throwback hats.
->>first line way stretched but the second line was good

I "run over" schmucks, like "trucks", and I "drive all day" fa fun.
"Lekchur" thinks shes gonna win, but "her-luck"** is done.
->>weak first line and i cant see the information on the side

Gee you really got fucked over by the new battle system. Your shit mightve been good but i cant see what youre talking about so the punches fell apart. Your structure is a little off. Your verse wasnt terrible but it wouldve been a lot better if I could see what you were talking about.

Lekchur you came pretty good here I liked some of the stuff you were saying. Your good bars were good and your bad ones were bad but you had some creativity in there that I could definietely appreciate and I thought you had a pretty good overall verse.

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