^^ya that was real helpful...lol....look kurse even out your lines so there the same length this will help your structure n will look better 2..i've seen your shit your biggest problem is you punches....you need ta work on them....

2 lines=1 bar your rhymin words should be at the end of each sentence.4 beginners
your punch should be a personal diss ta your opponent...ex
if i were battlin you n said..........

i don't think you can rap,you jus a bitch at that,
im a nasty dawg n i'll eat you up like a cat,

^^this shit sucks...no punch ..nothin..oppose ta this...

peeps don't "watch" ya unless you intertwined time with your verse,
your "wraps" botched n don't hold weight like a bottomless purse,

first line..wordplay..watch refers 2 time...nobody gives your verse the time of day..(get it)
2nd line..wraps botched ...wordplay..your raps are fucked..n don't hold ground....
(ya follow)
peeps don't "watch" ya unless you intertwined time with your verse,
your "wraps" botched n don't hold weight like a bottomless purse,


now all this with internal rhymes flow well.....internals are words that line up top n bottom...........if ya like doin this ..keep doin it but id suggest checkin out the tutorials....pc.....goo'luck on elevatin...DV8

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