What up, I'm new here. 16 year old dude from detroit (my name is sleah david). I'm a poet but I love hip-hop (rap is different but ne way). U had a nice verse, but it seemed a lil unfocused. I just think u would really be killin em wit it if u stuck to the topic more and elaborated on the stuff in the verse and then save somethin else in the first verse for the seconf then elaborate on that. I hope u appreciate my honesty and don't think I'm hating. I'd apprecitate ur's if u read my poem called "higher". It's my first post so I hope u look at it and read the whole thing and give me ur honest opinion. thanx
~Selah~ (think about it)