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Old 08-07-04, 07:09 PM   #17
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This was feedback posted for Decree Wun

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Decree... Nice opener! good structure throughout...loads of disses but very few personals (3rd bar was only personal)
rhymes were better overall didn't really like ya closer.

Forsaken... had more personals but they shoulda hit harder. rhyme was ok but not enough to topple decree... structure coulda been a little better... there were a few filler lines that i didn't like... the cascade one and the "he's no abuser" line... they were pretty weak... closer battle than what it seems
but vote goes to Decree.... if i had the 200 posts
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