Thread: Death Wish
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Old 08-09-04, 03:39 PM   #6
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if ya bring that format of 3 rymes ta each bar in a battle its gonna hurt ya verse,n you should loose the "with"at the end of your 1st 3 lines ..its kinda wack...n not needed..decent scheme..no wordplay ...5/10
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