Feedback appreciated except if I took the 'with's off it wouldnt make sense. Do you people actually read what the verse is about or do you just pick up on rhymes and shit? Plus beckon dosn't rhyme with enemies but bekon with half rhymes with it. Also whats wrong with having 3 rhymes per line, it makes sense don't it? I don't understand whats wrong with the things you pointed out.

edit: please explain if theres something I'm not getting.

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~Wrekless

You know the rappers these days that snap then breeze ways//
In the opposite direction of the gat that he says//
He'll cap, if you aint on in don't say you are//
before someone engraves a scar on your inflated arse//

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