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Old 08-10-04, 12:31 AM   #11
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Voted For: Red Bull

Red BUll:

ocelot was easy to defeat, thats the only reason you won. the punch hit, but it wasnt strong. cussing in your rhymes is a newbish way to fill in words where complex vocab could be. so try not to swear, it doesnt help. first line was a good opener for this bar, but the second line didnt finish off what you began to accomplish.

i give this a 5/10

5 points b/c: lack of structure, comdey, and closure.
positive: you had some multis, keep that up.

congrats on your win.

vote:Red Bull

return the honest favor.

http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=141069

or hit up a battle in my sig. use expalined votes please, thanx
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