terrible...

venom... stop reading nursery books and pick up something with more than one syllable words in it... "See Dick Run" lines won't work here. no originality,wordplay, vocab, meta's, personals, and very weak punches... you got in over ya head in this one.

soin... not much better ... but better none-the-less. you had better punches, structure was a little better,but lines were still kinda weak... work on wordplay...v/ soin