Ok then, I thought the poem was a good lenghh, not short like My dad wasn't there do I look like I care, nah, that'd be square . It shows you were putting your heart & soul into it, that's what rap should be about, saying something, wether it's you or world affairs, that was brill.

Do I think it could improve?, maybe, I don't think so, I think it's a very good and compelling story, and that's what i like in rap songs, probably why I prefer Em's more powerful song's like The Way I Am and Cleanin' Out My Closet.

My 'constructive criticism' could improve tho', I just think it's good, good length, kinda brings a tear to a teens eye, nearly shedded a tear, but didn't, although it is kinda a heart-felt story, good work, very good work.

jeez, my thread's are long, lol.