^yea, you need to drop a link to a piece you left feedback in. Or else yo thread will be deleted. But still, I'll drop feedback:

Yea, this was a pretty nice drop. But the thing is this:
Yo structure might make people not read. Cuz I mean, it jus keeps on goin' and goin' wit one line. ya kno what I mean?
Try to make it like one line wit a word, and the second line rhymes wit the next word. And try to keep it like between 10-15 syllables. That helps me when I write. Jus count out the syllables, and make them be close toghether in value.

But as for the piece, it was nice. You had some nice rhymin' and flowin' goin' on. pretty good vocab. Overall nice job. Keep droppin' and elevatin'. pc

I give it a 8/10