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Originally posted by BaByGeE894
I think I'm going crazy, like my soul is trying to rip through my flesh/
This thing I once called my life, has turned into another big mess/
My boyfriend is always gone, doesn't seem like he wants to be around me anymore/
And every opportunity is just another closed door/
Why do I try to do anything to better myself when no one wants to notice?/
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These seem to be the lines that stuck out the most to me
Maybe cause i know what your talking about, but the way you express yourself in these 1st few beginng lines leads you into a very powerful body and end...that's how most your relationship poems are, thats what makes them most unique
from what i recall...This was another great piece...nice job.
-Epik