Thread: "the evils" -rate it-
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Old 08-16-04, 04:09 AM   #2
BrOTheRP.A.R.A.
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that was good man but the last 5 lines were wack you should fix them up ight
flow 7/10
vocab6/10
storyline 7/10
overall 7/10 good peice fix the last 5 lines there wack
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