Voted For: VIRTUE

virtue....
Ur rhymes were kinda predictable.u need more complex vocab...the content and imagery was good,but i feel u need more depth to your writing.it was quite simplistic with the imagery really.rather than jumping from one part of ur verse to another(like from crashing on the dash..to goin to hospital)..u shud try write in depth(like surroundings,noises,feelingseycetc,,,)
overall it was decentish. 6/10......

A.K.A....structure was poor,which made the flow choppy(and lose the "\\"it doesnt do anythin 4 ur piece.)u had the same problems as virtue in your vocab,imagery,depth....apart from yours was worse...u jumpin from one line to another with no depth...overall i didnt really like ur piece because it lacked everythin really.ok content but it needs to be a lot deeper
overall 4/10....looks like a freestyle verse.

vote-virtue...although urs wasnt great,it was all round beta than a.k.a.
both need to up vocab,multies to improve flow,depth and imagery.

return tha fav.

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