yo, i really liked this, it would be great to a soft beat, spoken word type poem, nice, descriptive words and imagery in this piece, my favorite were these:
'Change the changed, don’t worry I wont listen
And as the revival comes breath to the lungs hold it for the intermission
As the remission comes we all know what’s going to be happening
Your gonna be filled, the tensions will build
But the interventions will save you"
Very well said, keep it up...............

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