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Old 08-17-04, 02:24 AM   #13
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Voted For: Triple_N

One-Man-Band: this was ur challenge, ur structure was off a lil' well i can't lie just off, but u had decent wordplay, the best was prolly-
yo man check it, its rap war! and ill have this cat "MIA" ... like instant messengers backwards!!**
^that was nice but the AIM thing didn't do much.. ur verse was nice but just a diss on his audio which didn't hit too hard.. the beginner wasn't bad you know.. but u had more multis but they coulda been done better, u dropped hard but the closer.. oh my god i'm tired of explainin'.. my eyes hurt! Basically, One-Man-Band, u coulda done better you had a good start but fell off and real hard the closer killed you..
6/10 for ur effort... i expected mo' from u than this!

Triple_N: only 10 lines but every line had it's own thing goin'n' and they all hit hard.. word play was sic- especially the end.. the bone thugs part and the han solo and yoda was very original, it's funny cuz nowhere in ur verse did u lose ur flow.. everything stayed on point, best lines were:
He frequently secretly attends men's night at gay clubs
I mean his avatar proves dat he loves to bone thugs
^ brilliant very nice, really.. structure was str8, vocab was aight too (broth) not bad.. the closer completed my decision, i can't lie and say this was a close battle cuz i wasn't u had the shorter verse but u delivered more direct punches than his and got personal at the same time, One-Man-Band not bad either, u just have stuff u might wanna work on- personals are nice if u can tie in the punches with it.. maybe u two should do a re-match, good job.. see ya two not hate either.. but the vote is for:
Triple N- keep doin' ur thing man..
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