Voted For: Lynx Gravity

Lynx:
think he cud cook somethin up, but he seens to have lost his recipe//
this pimp couldn't last in the "High Life" if he uses ecstacy//
creative opener, I liked it...
i leave this chumps bar going both sides of a train rails//
this cat's deliveries is slower than oversea snail mails//
didnt get the 1st line, 2nd was ok but weak punch...
your fake potential obviously matches your hybrid theory//
your "rip" is "off" more than that indian at your local dairy//
not really a punch directed at him, could be used on anyone...
if you work at "CNN" you still wouldn't make "Live Feedage"//
cause your weak rhymes are no tighter than your mom's cleavage//
weak punch...
cause your lines are no sicker than a cheesy horror movie//
and your name clearly states that you're just here to do me//
alright closer, weak punch, alright personal...
7.5/10 overall
Pimp:
im like a hurracaine shakin tha world
addin u to my crew will be da last resort
sentencing ur life like this was court
self-glorifying + weak punches...
like houston ur shit is pre- written
we no ur verse aint ur own spittin
cuz it aint hittin//
weak punch...
we got higher expectations
them wak ass lyrics aint gon make it
like an orgasm u just gon fake it
best punch you had...yet weak...
ur flow sounds like my bitch while she cryin
like 50 cent im gonna get rich while u die tryin
not bad...
my flow is too tite it makes u confused
u gonna hear dis even if ur sounds were on mute
good closer...
4/10 overall

Lynx, good verse, your gettin my vote for good use of structure, wordplay, metas, personals, and moderate vocab

Pimp, I think you got some work to do as you said...
Fix your structure big time, longer and better formatting,
Also up the vocab, use better multis and metas, and get some harder punches...payce.....

Please return the favor with an honest vote as I have just done for you. Help me end this fuckin thing...
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