Voted For: Ice Pick
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Originally Posted by Ice Pick
I'm evictin'-ya-punches..best "hock ya' sPiT" for PENNIEZ at a Pawn shop
'dis Rook-ie so WEAK he couldn't "break" Knight{night} wit Bishopz on calm blockz
->>ehh..i get the chess theme but its a forced multi which im not a fan of
battlin' PICKS dropz??.Phantom U pUUssy.."douche" ya' Raw sPiTz
cause da only place U bringin' da FUNK bitch from is ya' Arm-Pitz
->>been done before but it was pretty cool
assault U with Speed Stickz 'til ya' fate is a (Right) Guard-ed Secret like passwords
I leave you like avy only its TUPAC spelled backwards
->>other than structure it was cool...second line was nice...creative stuff
Smash ur bladder-quick-into-waste. Corny ass style, half-tha-shit-ends-up-paste(d).
Give u a window of opportunity and shatter-it-in-yo-face! kid
->>forced internal multi in first line...you didnt need it you should have left it out...other than that decent punch
My sik shotz produce-da-(blood)Stainz.."water" ya MELON..got Fruit-fa-Brainz
but couldn't gain CLEARANCE.."infringe" upon ICE and i'll nuke-ya-frame
->>ehh...i dunno you came from too many directions it was confusing...it was like an ADD bar
recoup-da-LOOT-of-lamez who clearly aren't ready to "Pay-da-Price"
in 'dis Community, i'm Godly..when we battle, U pray to- ICE
->>nah...
Rip ya verse-on-will, u ain't a 3rd-my-skill. PICK curse-until blood is shed, got a thirst-4-kills..
Stop ridin my jock bitch..askin bout me, I'm type "person-ill." [personal]
->>i didnt understand the second line ...first line was all multis not a lot of substance
This hoe-disses-me.. man, theres no-escape-from-tha-kill..
Nunchucks like rotisserie when they "rotate-on-ya-grill."
->>haha creative as hell...niiice
->>you have a lot of creativity but when you do filler it comes off weak...if you put in filler it needs to jive with the rest of your verse you cant switch the style up in your filler or it draws all the attention to it...overall this was a mediocre verse but when you are good in a line youre fire...im looking forward to seeing really good things out of you. Once you get to the 'every line is a hot line' stage youll be unstoppable. you did have enough for the win here though[/b]
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[quote=Phantom]
you aint sick, ice prick, your names says your 'flows' are 'stiff'
keep grip and dont slip as i leave you hangin on an icy cliff
->>nah...weak opener
this weak fuck freezes up when the beef heats up
its hoes down g's up, so lay down and lemme put my feet up
->>this was filler...you gotta hit him hard esp in a battle this short
i pimp slap backwards this faggot ass rapper
toss him out the window just like a candy wrapper
->>this was filler too...get personal you couldve said this to anybody
you 'pick'-ed the wrong nigga to battle, your in deep trouble
the heat that im puttin to to ya will leave u as a puddle
->>you already did the ice/heat connection earlier in this battle...fillerish
you battle noobs for wins, you aint one of the best
your weak, ribs shatter, lungs collapse, when you pound ya chest
->>nah...
i didnt even merk you, this is a murder ya loser
but its cool how your sig predicted ya future (skeleton)
->>first decent personal in your verse...this was my fav bar out of yours
->>real average verse here...read the tutorial about personals...you have to come harder than that unless youre gonna battle noobs...it was a nice try but it just wasnt enough for the win here