wow, well,i liked it , a little intense but its good, i like how you put emotion into your things, the last line i think you could do alot wit well the last two lines
"so remember before u bring sumone down
they might have on a smile but insides its a frown"

that you could play off of alot , not as strong as i would have liked to see it vocab wise, but again it was the emotion that comes through when you read it
nice keep em comin