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Old 08-23-04, 10:21 PM   #14
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Voted For: MR. ZACHY DOOM

I give this one to Zachy doomstar wateva it is, Altho the structure could use a little work, but the verse was good stuff. I cudnt see anythin as far as personals go, but Zzchy had much better wordplay,
I've shot a couple people
But only with a camera's eye

that line was the best in the battle.
I dont actually know where to start with Zimmo's verse
I can see where you were trying to go but there was just too much basic rhyming and the structure just throws you off straight away, but all i can say is improve your structure and elevate
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