There is a little substance, they call it Mary Jane,
Whatever name you call it, you still smoking the same,
^decent line ok intro
But the amount we smoke the shit is almost nearly insane
Surrounded by smoke so much, that’s become our name
^1st line iffy...2nd last part was'nt 2 good..
We never really noticed, too stoned off our brain,
But when the high times left us, we got it through pain,
^was'nt feeling it"worded badly but nice idea
Smoke in our lungs so much, the joints like a crane,
Pulls the bad shit out, and gets us high again,
^^ok..crane??dint get it
Do anything for weed, we’ll even rob a train,
Be on the 9pm news, unlike others not the same,
^ok...2nd line could've been better
Goin that far for drugs, gotta be addicted,
Fuck it, pass the rizla, my turn to skin shit,
^koo line liked it..1 of the best in the piece
I got a fat one rolled now, time to get it blitzted,
See that’s my new word, cos with piggys won’t risk it,
^ok kinda throws ya off flow with ya new word
I’m not getting jailed this young just over contraband,
The only way I’ll ever go down, is if I kill a man,
^to much explain ing "repeated the point"
But the chance of that happenin, in this truly stoned state,
Is round the same as horsforth school takin down that green gate,
^dunno bout "horsforth..but decent
Speakin of Green, I think it’s time for my next hit,
Slow the beat down, pass the blunt lets spark it
^endin was koo..bit short but still good..


overall not bad try n even out your structure it'll help ya syllable count dint find it was great for meta's or wordplay might wanna try some of those ,it makes for a more enjoyable n more complex read....less predictable"1 line i would've changed for sure was this 1

We never really noticed, too stoned off our brain,
But when the high times left us, we got it through pain,

maybe like this:::.......

too stoned off the brain thoughts jumpin out n not gettin noticed,
it was pain when high times left us cause our clarity was unfocused,

i dunno something like that^^^^

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