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Old 08-26-04, 02:59 AM   #4
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THOUGHT IT WAS DECENT LIKED THE liked the 2nd verse more had better content n seemed ta flow well so issues with the rhyme scheme in verse 2...were they both written by you?...in audio i think ya might've been able ta pull off some of those rhymes but its harder in text...was this supposed ta be audio? overall i liked your idea's but you lacked a little on vocab....i honestly don't think it compares ta your stuff i've commented on b4....but still nice job..keep it up killa
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