Not Very Impressive, to tell ya tha truth...

I felt like it was basic & there was no concept except "im this, im that"

Try to create a more original piece, and try to increase your vocab & imagery...punches also need a bit of work as they really werent hard hitten ,try to really grab tha attention of tha reader/listener...

Keep postin bro, only my opinion...take care

peace n god bless