That was plain funny to me..!!

Verse one was the worst i thought...lyrically, it had a good flow to it mostly, but tha imagery, multi's, vocab and whole **BLAOW** was missing..

Verse Two, came with a better idealogy of multi dropping and imagery showing...much betta...

I think you can probably do bettah, get at me on AIM: KtothaD if you have any questions or anythang..

Take care...

peace n god bless