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Old 08-30-04, 03:01 AM   #16
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and even though they dont got "hands" ima let the bullets "touch ya"/
my "confession"...when i take out the 4/5 ima let it "burn" like "usher"/
^this line alone is enough to crush "2pacs" whole verse.

2pac, how you gonna expect to win a battle when all you do is ramble and cliche? No wordplay, no hard hitting punch, no nothing. Overall you both need to work on flow. You usually want all your lines to be around the same length and the same syllables. Keep improving.

that last line was clever though jew. Concised it up and that would've been a classic line.
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