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Old 08-30-04, 03:23 PM   #26
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Voted For: Reckless

aight i dissected this shit thoroughly.. i'm not finna do the votin' line by line shit takes too long, so anywayz...

both y'all dropped hard for this shit.. good job first of all..

*personals- by far: Reckless, from your nationality plus links,
and the quotes of him catchin' u callin' urself a red neck, etc. nice work.. and nice wordin' for personals Reckless.. the better name diss was the world famous- swan lmfao..
World famous ur personals were nice too but u didn't have many that had a great effect, like the one with Reckless- missing a "W" connecting with him not winning battles (which is not true obviously) but whateva, not too bad..

*punches- pretty much even so no explanation, it's TIED

*flow- even TIED

*wordplay- some how, it's more sided to world famous for step son, a-rival.. which actually not as good as it coulda been but you used more so you get that portion..

*vocab- simple Reckless, he took it becuz his vocab flowed better with his verse as a whole..

*multis- neither..

*metas- neither..

*opener-
u copy RB vets styles & punches, i'll swallow this head
cuz even orders are sick and tired of u following them ..
^ what turns me away from this being the best one- is the i'll "swallow this head" part, that sounds SOOOOO fuckin' gay, it's not even funny... besides that fact, not bad using the "orders", "following them" part, not bad at all.. 7/10

You say you're Irish, Polish, Jewish, white, and... everything else
Also the poster boy for birth control, I mean... look at yourself
^nice link to go with the punch, and nice opener startin' off with a unique personal.. nice 7.2/10
RECKLESS took the opener category..

*closer-
even Phenom-in-all hates u, nobody bought it though
till he said 'im out like spuls chance of makin good audio'
^everyone knows phenom-in-all don't like SPuL- repeatin' this in the last line was REALLY weak, but it did rhyme and flow so you get a 5.2/10

Unlike people's beliefs....................................... my rustyness is gone
If you wanna be World Famous............. I suggest you go on Swan
^i didn't like how u separated usin' space between the bar so much, but you started with a nice personal and ended with an even better one.. u didn't have to mention ur rustyness being gone so yours would be.. 6/10
RECKLESS took the closer also..

OVERALL: if i explain this any more, then i'ma fuckin' pass out.. simply put, both had nice verses, good punches, strength fell more on Reckless's side, wordplay more on world famous, explanations very true on both sides.. but the structure completes my decision which is Reckless's he got this, no hate, world famous but you were lackin' more things than Reckless, i already said where, so look ^up there sumwheres.. Reckless you had some down falls too, nigga, use wordplay you might have took this even more easier.. but yea anywayz.. it's done with..
Reckless takin' it.. oh yeah no hate Feeble Minded, study tho..
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