This is quite a strange flow, it was a basic story line but the wordplay was something different... The rhyme scheme was quite simple, used a simple form, multies were used which were good to see, it was smooth... The vocab was lacced, nothing that really caught me eye... I think ya need to work on your ideas, this werent even funny in my opinion, im hoping you were trying to be... This was very basic, ya need to structure your flow on some complexity, keep spitting and elevating, and think with your mind, not with the keys...

Peez...