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Old 09-04-04, 02:23 AM   #27
Magic5
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Voted For: schema

schema
structure is pretty good.. a few of ur lines are stretched.. flow is good for the most part.. no multis.. wordplay is pretty good.. some of ur punches connected.. decent personal in the opener..

intensify effect
structure is ok.. a few of ur lines are stretched as well.. flow is on target.. no multis.. attempted wordplay, but that shit came out wack.. a few, at best, of ur punches connected.. no good personals..

Overall
both had a good structure.. both had a good flow.. neither had multis.. schema had better wordplay.. more connecting punches.. and better personals.. so basing off of that.. schema gets my vote..

VOTE - SCHEMA