I didnt mind the length, thought this was solid, it had both its good points and bad, the vocab was nice, though there were some repeated words, one was rhyming... Wordplay stood through, nice similes in the opening lines, I was feeling em, thought it started better then it ended... There were some powerful lines in there, a lot of eye openers and made ya think... The concept was nice aswell, some good ideas coming out and being released... Rhythm is something that ya may wanna work on, the multies were lacced, this does help the rhythm, give it some smoothness... More internal rhymes aswell makes the flow flawless, look into that... Keep elevating man, like your wording, keep spitting and sharpening that mental...

Peez...