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dope dope dope dope.....fantastic syllable count..good rhyme scheme and multis...concept was nice and you carried your idea beautifully...it was long...but the transitions made it an easy read...the only thing i would reccomend for you to do differently..use complete sentences more often...what you did was fine for this piece...it couldn't of been better.....but just for other pieces....it'd be a good idea...anyways....much respect to ya....and it took me around 35-45 minutes to write anti trust....just to answer your question....keep droppin..and let me know so i can keep readin
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