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Old 09-07-04, 01:00 AM   #3
~Sonofisis~
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"Cocrahn can't get us all out of jail"
I know that's what u meant, that was ill.. see, i like this piece because it actually matters, i'm black so i can relate in certain ways.. I don't care how far we've came, we still have a long way to go, ya feel me? But yo peice was very heart felt, nice flow, made a whole lot of sense.. some of the quotables was a clever way to get your point across.. keep it up man.. my only suggestion is to work on the wordplay, try to rhyme with more syllables n shit, but other wise this verse was tight, 1..
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