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Old 09-07-04, 03:53 AM   #16
Spektikul
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Voted For: Empire

Opener - Succ, was stronger than Emps
Closer - Emp, Succ, yours was weak dawg
Punches - Emp, Succ you coulda used those punches on anyone, get more creative and focus on the specific person your battling
Personals - Emp, he had more and explained them too
Metas - Succ, thats prolly what he used for 85% of his verse
Multies - Emp, he actually had some, succ didnt
Structure - Emp, much neater
Vocab - Neither had anything great

succ: You need to elevate on Punches and personals, but not only that, I feel you gotta fix up your structure cause it kinda throws off the flow of your verse. Find a format that you can really feel, and clean it up by keeping sentences together without the ....... everywhere.

Emp: You merked this guy with half as many lines as he did. Well done man. I usually give eveyone an area to elevate in but you seem to be commin along fine. Keep doin what your doin man. No hate.

-Vote Empire...