This was a deep piece man, quite solid in places, very meaningful though and you showed your emotions well... The flow was sturdy, I think your multies shone through, but more internal rhymes woulda made this a winner... The vocab was quite balanced, a lot of words were repeated though, otherwise from that it was nicely used, kept a good range throughout... Didnt like how the same "hook" was repeated after everything, wordplay was aight, it was working sometimes with the similes, metaphors coulda given it a deeper sense, but I liked the realism in this piece, it was mos def a decent read... Keep elevating and spitting...

Peez...