It aint the end of the world, this is jus too simplistic, theres no complexity, no power in this... Thats what your really looking for... Everyone starts like this, jus keep spitting and elevating, look above for the tips... Try using some multies and complicate your bars to make a personal style and elevate through it... I seen worse then this sun so dont worry about it, jus put another script out, you will improve...

Peez...