alright mad dog....your verse was alright...some of your choice words for rhyme words wern't the greatest...youtr vocab was good at times...and at times it wasn't..and your story jumped off too quick...it made it interesting at first...but with all the action and no plot twist..it lost it's luster....nice verse though


Poet...nice verse...very nice....transitions were good....you ended every part at just the right time....AWSOME imagery....you and mad dog both had good imagery..but i saw your verse a little more for some reason...vocab was nice...and this



As I pace slow-mo to the elevator..........Press floor 8 then wait for the doors to close..
Im standing posed.. Watching the world pass, my mind goes......Like I physically froze..
Then snap back to reality.. Return with my killer mentality.. Crystal clear with actuality..
Checkin my clip as I dump my coat, clear my throat..Now its Time for a fucking "Corperate

i really liked....I interpreted that as a guy who is doin what he was sent to do....but is maybe seein the world through different views than just life and death....like maybe he is starting to feel some kind of value....and than he just snaps back to what his reality is....could be a wrong interpretation...but thats what poetry is for...

i give my vote to poet...you both had good verses...i just think poets ability to word his thoughts..amd creativity won this over..good battle though..much respect

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