This was quite similar to another piece of yours I read, thought it come hella iLL with the wordplay and punches, but jus lacced the substance it needed... Your bars are quicc and easy to read, rhythm was there, sometimes jus feel you could use more complexity into your rhyme scheme cos its quite narrow... The wordplay and vocab combined gave it a hard hitting feel, and it would be a good battle verse... I wanna see you spit something with a story line or some depth, I think mos def you got the talent to do that... Keep spitting and elevating, feeling parts of this...

Peez...