alright since ya wanted some critcism. here what im feelin. even though the wordplay for an intenal rhyme scheme was there. ask your self what the reason i post this. dont get me wrong this was dope but why did u post this. what were ya trying to say with it. i realy didnt find a message behind your peice. see with 'weapon of choice' the 1st verse is almost a movie pitch in which the 2nd verse is can be figured out in the 1st 2 barz. it wasnt nothing extorinare with emotion but it said sumptin. just though i tell ya what i thought a on how to elevteyour peices. no bef. lik before stay up an be active.

joey