I think the vocab and knowledge in this was flawless, but it lacced the power and hard hitting lines it needed... It seemed like a battle verse without the punches and it had no substance... The flow was sturdy always working with a quicc flow, the syllables were matched, more multies and internal rhymes woulda made more rhythm... The vocab was iLL, knowledge words are obviously your strong point, and you showed through... Wordplay was aight, some similes and metaphors but it coulda come stronger in the punches and thats what I think you needed... Try spitting something with some substance, and it would push through... Keep spitting and elevating, you got mass potential, would wanna read something interesting though...

Peez..