ok i dont usually give feedback on poems so forgive me if i do badly. i really like the metaphor of her heart being a maze but maybe you can turn your love for her/eachother into the maze and their are walls and things in the way (i.e. Jacob). i also think you should add some more about her like how you wish she would do the same as you and get thru the maze together ya know?i like how you added the part that you will never cheat or lie that really plays a deep role into the fact that in the end, it doesnt help. good shit on the real. i dunno if youre girl will look that deep into it but if she does at least you got somethin there.

__________________

Soundclick