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Old 09-12-04, 04:10 PM   #17
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Voted For: Eyvon

eyevon easily wins this.eye had the flow and the better lines down good.the opening was pretty good:

Ayo, my pen and paper cause a chain reaction/
To get your brain relaxin, cause they be actin maniac in action/
A brainiac in fact son, you mainly lack attraction/
You looking zany whack with just a fraction of my tracks spun/

^that was dope and went good with the flow.ms...you were'nt that great in your verse..you came too basic.

for example:

Whether with Hi-tek, I work with QUALITY like Talib works with Brother Mos/
You ran from the first battle and came and made another post/
You little brat. You don't need a mic, you need a whoopin' from ya mama/
I simply gave comments for a rap of yours and then you came with all the drama/How mature is that? /

that was a weak opener and it was too simple..you need more punches and harder hitting metaphores in your verse.both of you need more nameplay and personals too.if you dont diss the name then a verse is nothing.both came a little less than average..but eye gets the vote.

if you'd like both of you can check my thread in the "emergency help" forum for textees.
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