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Voted For: Poet
Poet vrs Proverse Annialation:
Proverse: i was comprehending all words n statistics. but your character had me feeling gloomy, you should picked up more relation to the topic of lost dreams (having dreams at one point, and slowly fading from dreams to drempt n swallowed) you breifly discussed the facts on which your character had daily dreams n believed in a ture outcome, lines were nice n short, not stretching your rhymes is always good, ill give you positive feedback for your closing lines. but your drop was awfully narrow. you only dropped nearly 25 lines. compared to poet's thorough essay, your verse looks like a grade C effort. that was your downfall. the negative response of my opinion seems to overlap the positive remarks, evidently leading to: your 36/50 on this topical. (completely in my opinion.)
Poet:my first impretion on your drop was decent as i opened lines and began to read and digest, you have nice flow, the structure for me was hard to commend but easy to pick up on after the first 2-3 bars, the negative aspect about your rhymes was equal to the fact some lines were stretched longer than thier origin similie. you had to many syllables in a few lines to throw the flow off a bit. on the other side, dont think im eccentric to state you have a real blessed analogy, you have great research behind your topic, it seemed more effort given than proverse as well, you dont have a deep meaning to create an antitype to your essay, but your blunt and precise, which can make up for that tradition. in all decency i tried to expand my opinion by reading your partial entry again, and yet came to the conclusion that you deserve fully: a 43/50 on this topical.
similarities- you both mantained a solid focus to align and follow the given topic.
- both created a visual scene and a timespan of reflection to easily compare dreams from failure
differences- poet merely inquires the complete stability to produce a better experienced verse.
- proverse had a basic and fundamental reading/comprehending line adjustment.
- poet gave a 100 % effort through my understanding, and had the knowledge of keying mature lyrics compared to fundamental.
( this sates and concludes verb's opinion, and nothing more )
it would be a blessing for either indivisual to look up and tackle a vote on one of my open battles, please return the favor of an honest and well explained vote...
thank you,
]VOTE:Poet
Erm, Bye.
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