This is nice, you remind me of how I used to spit bout a year bacc, delivering strong vocab and imagery... The concept was deep and infactuated with imagery and figuarative language, playing our a broad scene... The first line was iLL, caught my eye and the knowledge developed throughout, with lines of history... The rhyme scheme was sturdy, internal rhymes and multies pushing through, to give you a good rhythm... Vocab your strongest point obviously, some of the words interesting, I would say tone it down slightly, because a good script is understandable to everyone, work on that because you have the potential to cut into your style... Mrtaphors and slight like of similes always pushed through, it was a good read, interesting, keep dropping the gems...

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