This is nice, im feeling it... I like the wordplay and concept involved, theres some powerful lines it was strong.. Sometimes found the rhyme scheme slightly choppy, work on your multies and internal rhymes... The vocab was good, balanced in places and you used a good knowledge... Wordplay was your strongest point, there were some good similes and punches and you come well in this... Keep spitting and elevating, it is a bit short thats a minor thing, look forward to seeing more of your work...

Peez...