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Old 09-14-04, 03:48 PM   #17
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Voted For: Malefic

first off..
DML- you don't start off a battle sayin' let's fight.. it's a no-brainer concept.. first bar- weak.. last bar maybe the the best or the Pamela Anderson one.. which wasn't too bad.. you didn't deliver anything hard hittin'.. it's like u stated how he's wack use allusions but didn't pin-point anything specific, it was like you were hypin' yourself, no real punches.. just self-compliments.. but it did rhyme, not bad flow but still.. no personals, punches, structure, and that bright color didn't help much.. so yea, 4/10..

malefic-
creative with the second half of the first bar.. but started off kinda weak.. terrible interruption- "and that's word.." you coulda put sumthin' different there but what the heck.. ya multis were better, seein' you had some.. in there.. vocab is equal amongst you two.. you last bar took the battle easily.. andthe part about the space bar.. that shit was hella funny.
6/10

But stickin' to adequate feedback concepts.. both verses were missin' hard hittin' punches, however, malefic delivered a couple towards the end.. which helped out a lot.. vocab both tied.. personals more on malefic's side... every other category seemed equal at the least.. not a bad battle from you two.. take the critism constructively, good luck with this battle..
~wun~

my vote.. malefic
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