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Voted For: JPoll
In ya grill onli candy-appears..maken u leave da game, u cant handle-ya-fears...
Slick bars like scandle-beers im fucken ur shyt up..next is the vandalist-cheers...
2/10
Some1 told u wrong Em's-not-my-idle, onli thing u taken is ya Lost-Personals-Title...
Throw mo lines den-my-rhyme-bible hittin dis fag like boxen-in-David's-Bridal...
2/10
First..ur-not-funny...second off ya punches soft come correct its-bunny-dummy...
Im flyen by u like Wizord Of Oz Monkeys hit u wit mo bars den travlen-drunkies...
3/10
Does them lines..Look-At-My-Sig..like old people i burn ur skole so snatch-da-wig...
Personals u tryed-to-dig..but got em wrong so i shoot em up like-sniper-pigs...
1/10
JPoll not-testen-dis or upsetten-dis..I quench ya thirst like-sierra-mist...
Im-tearen-dis..nex time wen u tryn hit personal get it right or prepare-a-list...
2/10
came with punches but they were all weak and simple and ya complexity wasent that good but you had nice wordplay and structure and ya meta's were ok
but ya personals were pretty much non existant
This kids $ik of text, like a dried up pen...
Grabbed a ladder touched the rim...
..............................and he finally got a 'ten'...
2/10
Moisturize his mess cause he's 'cummin' off dry...
Well the sites $ik of you like blowing snot through two ply...
2/10
This kids too lightweight, like a anorexic luncheon...
I mean fuck, $ik can't even get his sig links to function...
4/10
He's fucked, and he knows it if he thinks he's on the hunt...
He's got it twisted, like pad to mouth and cig to cunt.....
2/10
You beg door to door for praise, like a shy jehovahs witness...
Face it!!! you don't have a hope of winning...
..................................like afgani woman in the olympics...
5/10
ya punches were ok some of them were worded badly but i still got the point u were trying 2 get across
ya wordplay was pretty ok and ya structure looked stretched
in certain places~Ya complexity was prettty good kept it short
and simple
due 2 better punches and wordplay u get my vote
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