Voted For: villagepimp

this wasn't a bad battle...the verses were shorter, meaning you could not tell a story, and typically thats what i like...to see the message behind the story...but you both carried your verses well...drastic, i've never read your work before, and i was slightly impressed(i'm vry hard to please)

you stayed on topic, syllable count was decent..didn't have any fillers...the only thing i can say to you, is definately up your vocab....and try using multiple corresponding rhymes...it makes for better flow and better read...other than that your doin just fine.......Although i liked your verse...i liked Villages more, he didnt have a different kind of mission, but some of his lines really stood out....like...

I feel worse knowing this is a case of baseless depression...
It's a curse walking around carrying this faceless expression...
I never did fit in right... Now I cry & cry & cut my wrist at night...
Everyone trying to tell me it'll be okay... This is the last light...

those 2 bars


I pick up this gun hun and it'll be done in four with this revolver...
Steel to my temple, solution simple... Pull it and let blood trickle.. Problem solver...

and that last bar....were very nice...i'd give all 3 of them 10/10those bars were done beautifully...


Village, all i have to say to you is..some of your rhyme scheme and rhyme words seemed kind of amaturish...nothing real bad...just noticeable...but regardless..goodverse....nice battle to both of you.....much respect

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